I think it would read better with "the" in place of "golden". That extra syllable at the end throws it off. In this case, even if you said "the gate" I think it is implied and understood which gate is meant.
This sounds like an old-fashioned limerick, which I like about it. =0)
Thanks i did originaly have it a just the gate but i changed it >.< guess in terms of syllables i made a mistake (i'm only a hobbyist please forgive me! i know very little about poetry structuring)
anyways thanks for taking time to feed back and im glad you like it regardless of the error
This sounds like an old-fashioned limerick, which I like about it. =0)
anyways thanks for taking time to feed back and im glad you like it regardless of the error